Design Exchange Portfolio and Application

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5 Responses to “Design Exchange Portfolio and Application”

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   Abi

   February 13, 2007

   looks and feel pretty good, but one thing
   the line length for the description/blurb is way too short, bounces your eye around a little too much, either use two units of the grid or all three, even if the line took up that entire span (the area that the 3 text blocks occupy) that would be about say…65 characters, which is still good.

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   Tyler

   February 13, 2007

   In regards to abi’s comment, I didn’t feel it was hard to read the 3 columns of text. If you did change it, I’d say 2 columns rather than 1.

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   Andreas

   February 13, 2007

   I admired the way you managed to convey the machine construction (part 1) with so few images.
   I think you can consider to elaborate on the process (“the story”) a bit more, especially on the parka and the second part of the time machine.
   I am pleased to see dice man in several different settings, and I think potential viewers will think that too.

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4. 

   Graham

   February 13, 2007

   Overall it looked good to me. I have a number of comments about the text, which are below.
   Like Abi, I found it annoying to read the three columns of text, because the number of split words interrupted the flow of my reading. For example, on page six the following words are split across lines or columns:
   stu-dent, incorporat-ing, mecha-nism, coun-ter-bouy, pres-ent, ma-chine.
   On page 3, you mention the pun “Finding a Tion”, but I think this should read “Found A Tion”, as depicted in the photographs.
   On page 7, I don’t know why you mention your Italian professor, and I found it made the sentence less clear. If it is important leave it in though.
   On page 8, the last sentence is difficult to understand. I also think the word “register” should be “registers”.
   On Page 9, the word “exploration” should be “exploring”, I think.
   On Page 12, I don’t understand the sentence that ends with “… experiment in design thinking, work and input from other artists and designers.”
   Hope this helps.

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5. 

   Dylan

   February 16, 2007

   On the Time Machine (b) page shouldn’t the first sentence be “you were asked to make a….” instead of “we made”.
   When I read it, I got to the two choices you had, and then you clarified. But if it’s clearer it was part of the assignment then I understand your choice for solution better. I don’t know if that makes sense.
   Also, I’m repeating foundation english this semester, so you may want to ignore this anyways.

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